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Thursday, 30 August 2018

The Ice Palace

So Hi guys this week I have been working on A book called the Ice  Palace I have done some improvement on this work. I Was wondering if you have read this book before. Could you give me some feedback on my work? I have been working hard on this work I have tried my hardest to make it good and easy for you to read and understand. So I hope you can give me Some feedback. Here is my work.

Ivan live’s in this crazy world it is so miserable and cold. Ivan lives here no one knows why he lives here. Maybe he is up to know good. What does he do there maybe he has a secret job he might not want to tell anyone.

Ivan’s land is a land where there is a lot of big tretrases and snowy white hills. It looks like there is a white blanket. As you were walking up the big hill the snow would crunch under your feet like you are walking on a muesli bar!!!   
         
Thanks, Zack

2 comments:

  1. Hi Zack it's me James from Waikowhai Primary School. I really like the writing that you have wrote. This reminds me of the time we had to write about anything we wanted for writing. Maybe next time you could add some photos.If you are free you could check out my blog. Here it is http://wpsjamesp.blogspot.com/ Anyway keep the work up.

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